Journal 13

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The Villa Rotonda and many other works of Andrea Palladio had a look that was copied by architects after his time. Palladio was known as one of the originals of architecture. The Renaissance style of Villa Rotunda will be critiqued by another great architect: Francesco Borromini. Borromini was an innovatory of his time and brought new looks to the world of architecture. Will Borromini approve of the design of the Villa Rotonda?


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The Villa Rotunda and many other works of Andrea Palladio were some the most influential structures in the history of architecture. Palladio was known as one of the originals of architecture. Palladio published a book titled Quattro Libri Dell’ Architettura in 1570. Palladio shaped the architecture in the Renaissance with this book and his building designs. Less then a century later Francesco Borromini made a historical movement in architecture. Borromini created a new style of architect called baroque.  Baroque was an innovative new look at architecture. Borromini’s baroque broken and bent some of the traditional rules of architecture and took a more outgoing style. Will Borromini approve of the design of the Villa Rotonda?


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New thesis statement:
The Villa Rotunda was one of the most copied buildings in history, but Borromini would have not approve of the design overall. Borromini probably took ideas from Palladio’s design, but Francesco was all about using classical design and improving it with new creative style.